[Rumisha]

He!!o Mera Forum Friends
My !st Mf Des!gN PoeTry

 

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Last edited by Rumisha; 02-17-2010 at 11:37 PM..

[!!!sweety!!!]

very nice
first line mein hamari thik likha he baqi 3 mien worng he imla ki ghaltiyan he check kar lien

 

[!~*AdOrAbLe*~!]

beautifull work

 

[Zafina]

Zabardast....Oye thats means k ab may bhi maidan may uthar hi awo...soon u will see my designed poetries ..Keep it up sis

 

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And Your Lord Never Forget

[shani]

nice work mahnoor keep it up friend

 

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[SIGPIC][/SIGPIC]

LOVE... is not how you forget ;but How you forgive
Not how you listen; but how you understand
Not what you see; but what you feel
And not how you let go; but how you hold on

[SHAYAN]

Nice Poetry N Work

 

[AYAZ]

acha work hie ahista ahista aur bhi acha hojaey ga INSHALLAH first try good one (y) keep it up

 

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ALLAH FARMATA HAI :
AEY BANDEY JO HUA
WO ACHA HUA .
JO HORAHA HAI ACHA HO RAHA HAI.
JO HOGA WO BHI ACHA HOGA.
TERA KIYA GAIYA JO TU ROTA HAI
TU KIA LAYA JO TU NE KHO DIYA.
JO LIYA YAHIN (DUNYA) SEI LIYA
JO DIYA YAHIN (DUNYA) PE DIYA
JO AAJ TERA HAI PEHLAY KISI AUR KA THA
AUR KAL KISI AUR KA HOGA.
TABDEELI KAINAAT KA MAMOOL HAI
BAS TU WO JAMA KAR JO TU SATH LEI KAR JANEY WALA HAI
YANI NAIK AMAAL.

[Rumisha]

Originally Posted by !!!sweety!!!

very nice
first line mein hamari thik likha he baqi 3 mien worng he imla ki ghaltiyan he check kar lien

Siso aap nh theek tara se para nhi galtiya or be the..well i correct it again..thankz for tha remaning..

 

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[!!!sweety!!!]

Originally Posted by Mahnoor malik

Siso aap nh theek tara se para nhi galtiya or be the..well i correct it again..thankz for tha remaning..

hehe mene jo likha woh apne nhi para mene kaha tha ke first line mein hamari thik likha he baqi 3 mien worng he

uske bad mene kaha

imla ki ghaltiyan he check kar lien

matlab baqi poetry mien bhi ghaltiyan hein likhne mien inpage mein ghaltiyan ki apne

 

[Rumisha]

sis phele line main be galti the..jo aap nh pari nahi suno word be galt ta( jis main seen-noon-wow) ata hai main nh (seen-wow-noon-wow) likka ta--well poetry theek hai ab--ab aap ko koi shekayat to nhi ho ge i hope so--sis
galti to first time hr koi krta hai--aap se be howi ho gee--galtiyoo se insan seekh ta hai--any way--thankz for da comment--

 

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